1. Is the introductory paragraph interesting? Why or why not? Does the introduction specify clearly what is to be classified and/or divided into groups?
I thought the introductory paragraph was very interesting, because I wanted to know more about the cliques the author was writing about. It was also humorous, so it made me want to continue reading. The introduction is classified and divided into groups very clearly, because I knew from that paragraph what the author was going to write about.
2. Is there a clear thesis statement? Can you find a sentence (or two) that reveals the writer’s point or purpose for the classification and/or division? Type the sentence(s) below that you believe to be the writer’s thesis statement. If the thesis is implied, state it in your own words below.
“These are the groups you should look for, and remember decide wisely which you group you will be in.”
3. Is the writer’s basis of classification clear (see “Notes on Classification and Division” posted August 12th)? Why or why not? By what means is the writer grouping his or her subject matter?
Yes, the writer’s basis of classification was clear, because I was able to understand it. The author took each group and then clearly stated what that group was and consisted of.
4. Are the groups or categories clearly defined and uniquely named? Do any seem to overlap or appear oversimplified or based on stereotypes? Explain.
All the groups were clearly defined. I liked how the author used their creative side and made it very unique. I think some of the groups were stereotyped, but I feel that it was hard to not use them. Most schools are alike and if that was the experience the author had then it was right to use the groups the way they viewed them.
5. Would the essay improve if the paragraphs were arranged differently? Why/why not? Note any paragraph that seems out of order. Are the paragraphs connected to one another smoothly and logically? Are there transitions between paragraphs that help you understand how the writer’s ideas are connected? Explain.
I think the paragraphs were arranged well and didn’t need any changes. The paragraphs were connected smoothly and logically. I didn’t have any problems going from one paragraph to the other, so the transitions were done well.
6. Do individual paragraphs seem well detailed? What suggestions would you make about adding/subtracting specific examples to help illustrate the writer’s classification and/or division?
The paragraphs were very well detailed at the beginning. I would suggest to the author to make more details near the end of the essay to make it more effective.
7. Are all of the writer’s paragraphs unified and coherent? Indicate which paragraphs have any sentences that seem irrelevant (“unity” concerns) or out of order (“coherence” concerns).
All the writer’s paragraphs were unified and coherent. I don’t think any paragraphs were irrelevant or out of order.
8. Go back and read the first and last paragraph. Has the writer fulfilled the obligations he or she established in the introduction? Does the writer accomplish everything promised in the introduction, or does the essay go off track or seem to switch focus? Why or why not? How can the conclusion be improved?
I think the writer could have made the conclusion with more details and been able to sum up the rest of the essay. It went a little short, but the one liner did have a great affect on the reader. The body paragraphs were well detailed though.
9. Now look at sentences. Does the writer have sentences that strike you as effective because they include strong verbs, specific details, memorable phrases, or striking images? Does the writer have any words they repeat too often, use incorrectly, or misspells? Finally, does the writer have any tendencies for error they should be made aware of? (Think comma splices, run-on sentences, or switches in verb tense, etc.)
I thought the sentences were effective and the author used commas correctly. There weren’t many errors. I would suggest to the author to double space after each paragraph to make the distinction between each one.
10. Write a summary comment that explains what you like best about the paper. Then, describe the two features of the paper that most need improvement. What suggestion(s) for overcoming these problems do you have?
I liked reading this essay, it was humorous and made me want to keep reading. I also liked how the author grouped each clique and wrote about it in detail. The only improvement that I would suggest is to make the conclusion longer and sum up the rest of the essay in that one paragraph.
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